Wednesday, 13 October 2010

second draft of script

Second Draft

Animals in Jail - script

A Dark screen emerges

Through the dust of the Mexican desert, a jail Building is seen in the distance.

SLOW ZOOM IN (whilst being narrated)

The dust settles and we see the strong and large building standing alone in the arid landscape, the narrator is introducing the program and the prison. An old looking scorpion slowly scuttles by.

CUT TO;Inside of the prison

We view the inside of the Dark and damp Prison building, and the few jail cells that it has within it, The Animal inmates are in their variously shaped cells either sleeping, eating contra banned sweets or cleaning themselves. They have a simple existence and the viewer is led to believe on first glance do these harmless looking animals deserve to be here for their petty crimes? We are given an introduction by the narrator to the animals and their past history; some are doing time for biting other pets, or simply stealing food.

We focus on 3 animals an axolotl a squid like creature, Kiwi bird and a hare, all of these animals are deeply unhappy in this horrid place and feel their living conditions need to be improved greatly, the Axolotl has no water to bathe in, he needs this for his skin which in the humid desert landscape is becoming dry and cracked and his scales are filling with the sand. The hare hasn’t any food to eat and is hungry and unstable on its back legs, he seems to be becoming weak and his coat is a dull colour. The kiwi is crawling with fleas and itchy in his skin.
They are miserable in this place, it is dark, humid and depressing, and they long for a new home, to have freedom just once again.


The sun is setting on the desert landscape and some of our animal inmates are preparing their cells for sleeping, the axolotl is gazing out of his barred window into the night sky and watching the desert animals crawling away into their holes in the ground for the night.

CUT TO;Outer space (after effects used for this scene)

The great outer space where all the action starts to happen, a large asteroid is speeding its way along the vast solar system a brightly coloured planet that is glowing with a strong beam of light the force of this planet is so great it is attracting the pull of other space objects and debris, the most important of all being a shooting star.
The planet is travelling at a great speed and soon comes into close contact with Planet earth; the shooting star separates itself from the dying asteroids pull and soon makes its way through the Earths atmosphere and into the sky.
The star is burning brightly and shines up the night sky it is travelling towards the ground and making a large rumbling noise from its great speed and strength.

CUT TO;A long shot of the Prison

The prison is covered by the night sky the large star is falling towards the building and just misses a collision, shaking the earth beneath it and moving the building. The final resting place of the star is the group of trees that are close to the prison it is burning brightly and creating a large glow through the trees, the glow starts to dim gradually.


The sun is rising over the desert and creating its shadows, the prison is still standing and has a certain glow about it, as the sun rises we are shown the stars real power there has been a transformation of the desert there are small trees and plants flourishing the landscape, the prison building has ivy and plants engrossing it, the desert has become alive. The plants slowly start to grow larger the trees push through the ground and fill the sky, they are soon fighting for space as more and more of them flourish the landscape, all the different varieties of plants and flowers come into sight, the noises of new insects and hints of butterfly wings are hidden under the large leaves.

CUT TO;The inside of the prison

There has been a transformation and our 3 heroes are awoken to the noises of movement around their paws, the plants are growing inside the cells, they watch in disbelief at the miracle, the walls of the prison are starting to vibrate and become weak, the bricks loosen from their place and start to fall away, the walls are crumbling and soon our 3 creatures can see each other from where they are perched.

CUT TO;The Jungle

They venture into the jungle that has erupted from almost nowhere and breathe the fresh air, there is still some sand covering the ground, the rest has become rich in greenery and life the sun is shining through the large leaves above their heads they gaze into the endless jungle in amazement, they can hear the faint sound of a waterfall.

There is a sudden rumble above them they gaze upwards and spot a coconut tree full of nuts moving around fiercely and quickly, the motions seem harmless until a few nuts come loose and fall towards them.
The objects are falling at a great speed and intensity the animals can not help but stare they fall closer and closer until the screen fills to black.

CUT TO;Through the eyes of an animal

We are viewing through the animals eyes and the blurring slowly disappears until the shadow of a prison guard is becoming visible the guard leans over the creature and stares at him.


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